Internet( introduction)
Internet is a social
network to search information. In internet we get something with easy and some
people used internet as medium to games and also study. The company have now also provide services over the Internet for easier access. in the
present era not only use computers but also mobile phones already provide
internet access throughout the world. You get enjoyed internet anywhere. Internet
you get searching about education, games, music, film, chatting, etc and many
useful internet for all in the world. In internet also some people with advanced
technology some people or from the childrens or young generation used internet
with case negative for example watching porn so tobe to be broken young
genaration and many fraud in social network like offer employment to women but it is to sell or work as prostitutes, or in handphone get gift of many one million for
company seluller.
"In internet also some people with advanced technology some people or from the childrens or young generation used internet with case negative for example watching porn so tobe to be broken young genaration and many fraud in social network like offer employment to women but it is to sell or work as prostitutes, or in handphone get gift of many one million for company seluller." I think this sentences makes me confuse and it cannot called by conclusion, so you must make conclusion better than this,....
BalasHapusok... :)
your topic sentence can be changed like this " Internet is a social network that can help us to get new information.
BalasHapusYour introduction paragraph make me confuse Del. And after "point (.)" you have to use capital letters.
BalasHapusall: thank you friend for comment...
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